Goodbyes are too hard for me
The thought of the word makes it hard to breathe
Letting go of a life that was loved
Is already hard enough
Saying goodbye to a cold, frail hand
Mumbling words I don’t understand
They all say this is the end for sure
Oh, how I didn’t know how much this would hurt
Too skinny, barely alive
Everyone has watches out, counting the time
But I wish what they said wasn’t so true
The last thing I want is to ever lose you
86, still too young in my opinion
They say its better off if you weren’t even living
I guess I just don’t understand what it means
When a loved one is about to leave
I guess all I can do is pray
And hope that your final days
Are filled with love and happiness
And hopefully you know you’ll be truly missed
I have a confidence deep inside though
That you’re only leaving your temporary home
And you’re going to the skies above us
Starting your life of eternity in heaven
I know God’s waiting for you
And there’s nothing left for me to do
Just know I love you more than I can ever say
And I’ll see you again someday
I can relate to this. A LOT. *Applauds* Great poem!
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry you can relate :( but thank you so much!!
DeleteAre you trying to make me cry or what? Because it worked.
ReplyDeleteAnyway, I love it, its beautiful. No not even the word, "beautiful," can capture this sentiment and splendor of this awesome poem.
Girl, it's amazing!
xD I wasn't trying to but it means a lot that it did! ;)
DeleteAwwww, thank you so much Shaly, that means the world to hear <3 I've been really unsure about what I've been writing recently and really questioning if I should even pursue in writing, and it's comments like this that make me think that my pieces do actually mean something
Thank you so much sister!
Yes, you should continue writing! Now, define, "pursue," like get publish and become a raving hit? I think even if this happens or not, you should always write, no matter what. If its your full-time occupation, or remains a hobby. Let's face it, the writers like F. Scott Fitzgerald, S.E. Hinton, or many other classic authors, did not receive recognition. until later. Plus, I hope we stay friends for a long time. I would always love to read your poems and stories. (What happened with your book, "Spring Flowers?" Are you waiting till the Spring?)
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Sister? Was that auto-correct? If not, in some basic truth we can be sisters. Cool! No one has ever addressed me as that, outside of family.)
Awww thank you! And what I mean by pursue is... if it's something I should continue doing in general I guess. My literature is something I haven't been very proud of and it seems like the more I try to write, the more I dislike the words I type. Just conflicted on my purpose and if writing is what I'm supposed to do either as a hobby or professionally. Awww I hope we stay friend a long time too! I love reading yours too, I actually read your pieces to my mom and sister a lot and they love them as well!
DeleteAlso, as for the book, I was so close to pressing the 'publish' button on amazon, and then the site said I had to put my social security number in.... And I told my parents and they don't want me to give my social away online, which, I honestly understand.... So I'm probably going to have to wait until I'm 18 and can do it on my own to publish, since I don't have their permission to do so currently... But hopefully by time I am 18, I can finish my 4 book series and have a couple Christian books as well, I've been considering a devotion and I might try to do like half of it during nano, but I'm unsure of what I plan to write during nano, so the devotion may have to wait.
P.S, nope, not a typo xD I hope it was okay to call you that!
Ohhh, I get that. :) I sort of went through that, when I first started writing poetry and around the time I sent you my first pieces. I would love a work today, and dislike it the next, It wasn't till I realized I wasn't really proud of my onw style. Then, I developed my writing style, establishing what sort of writing styles I like from different authors. After, I realized I loved detailed poems and stories, that was my goal. Then, I want through the same thing again, this April and May. Then, I tried to realized what do I like to read about and what do I enjoy writing about, that every time I finish a poem I loved it. When, I figured out I love writing about Jesus and narrators who call out to Him in distress, everything fell into place. So, now whether, He likes it or don't or if I like it or don't, we're stuck with each other, because I can't write about anything else. (Does that help?)
DeleteAwww, that's so sweet! :) For real, they love it?! What did you read to them? Then, maybe I can share that poem with my family. I have had my mom read some of my work, and she loves it, but doesn't like they're too long.
I have no idea what I am going to write for next month either. But, there is this one idea, but I'm afraid if I say anything, I won't write it. So, its either that idea or just write poetry as often as I can.
I don't care what you call me, girl! It was just the first time anyone has ever called me or addressed me as, "sister," outside my family. ;)
I'm sorry that you've went through the same, it's not a fun process. I guess it's good though, it helped you find yourself and your place in literature. You hit the mark when you decided to go for detailed! It's something that you're really good at :) And yes, that absolutely helps, it gives me hope that maybe I'm just going through a rough patch in writing and that it's going to eventually change.
DeleteThey do!! I read "The Fall of Icarus" to my mom and then I read those haikus you sent me a while back to my sister, (she dislikes poetry, but I read it anyways and she actually took my phone from me and started reading them herself after I read them because she loved them so much.) I actually enjoy the longness, it really makes the story and add so much detail and meaning!
Ooo, keep that idea then, and I say go for it! Whether it's good or bad, if you feel strongly about it, I'm sure it will turn out great :)
Haha! Okay ^.^
Don't be sorry! :) I once, read a few letters, that are apart of a series of epistles called the, "Green Letters." I don't remember the author (he was a pastor/preacher) but I know these letters entail about spiritual growth, and were written as reminders to people who he knew about God and were heavily based on scripture. Anyway, one thing that I found interesting was that the author emphasized that we sometimes fail or go through tough times so may we grow and develop a closer relationship with God. Similar, to what King Solomon wrote, "Frustration is better than laughter, because a sad face is good for the heart." (Ecclesiastes 7:2). At first, I didn't understand this, "I was like how is being sad, any good! Isn't Solomon's wisdom supposed to come from God? How is this wise?" But it really is wise! My dad explained that in troubled times, Who do we need, Who do we realize we need? Who do we acknowledge? God! So, this is about spiritual growth, why can't it apply to other areas of life? Like writing? After, April and may, when I realized what I wanted to write about, I would pray and still pray right before I write, so I would appreciate and be proud of my own work and that Jesus would like it too. And to tell you the truth, it helps. So, ask God, I guess is what I'm trying to say. Come on, technically He is the author of the Bible, so He is a literary genius, awesome at writing both prose and poetry. (Thank you, be the way! Also, there is the poem called, "Footprints in the Sand," that I think you might like its by Mary Stevenson.)
DeleteI'm happy they liked it! Thank you. They knew what I was talking about when you read, "The Fall of Icarus?" I can totally tell you, what parts were hard to understand and explain the symbolism, if you want. Also, I'm going to show my family the haikus I wrote. My mom loves short and sweet poems, she likes my longer ones too, but she likes shorter ones better. I can't blame her.
I really want to write out the idea. I'm just not sure exactly how I going to correctly portray the theme. And if I don't do that one, I have another idea about two sisters, however, I am going to use the story of, "Cain and Abel," as a model, Edgar Allan Poe's, "Tell-Tale Heart," Victor Hugo's poem, "Cain," and the medieval legend, "The Wandering Jew."
If Gabby stopped writing I would stop breathing. No joke.
DeleteOh that's beautiful, I love that piece of scripture, I've always read it and pondered it, I think there's another one like it but I bit less vague.. I forget which one it is.... But anyways, that's beautiful and I love that, and thank you. :) Yesterday I really felt connected to God and it was just amazing, I couldn't find time to write sadly, but it gives me hope that I can start connecting to Him more since I've been kind of distanced lately. And honestly, that piece of scripture is one of my new favorites, it's so true, most of the time, our hard times are so we can turn to God and reconnect. (Btw I looked up that poem and it's soooo beautiful! It reminded me of this bracelet I once had that said, "Walking with Jesus" and it had a bunch of little footprints, it was so cute and it had a really special meaning with me, but sadly, I lost it. Anyways, I loved that poem, thank you so much for sharing it with me, :) )
DeleteHonestly, I've heard something similar to the story before, but I'm kind of unsure of the actual meaning... I can come up with a few ideas I got from it, and I can see the relation to the Lord (which is beautiful btw, such a pretty, elegant piece) But, anyways, I believe my mom understood since she seemed to love it. :) Also, how did your mom like the poems? :)
Oh! Also, random thought, so, you know how I live on the fenceline of a wildlife preserve? Well the other night I was just on the fenceline like looking out (bc it was sunset and really breezy and beautiful outside, so why not?) and I seen two beautiful eagles circling the flagpond. It was such a beautiful sight, idk why I just said that tbh, but just the scene with the purple and white lilies and the peach colored sunset at dusk reminded me so much of one your poems (I can't quite place it, it was one you emailed me a while ago with the clouds that were like silk?,) and I can imagine you writing something about an eagle. Random, yes, but I felt like it'd be something you'd enjoy hearing, (hopefully xD)
Ooo that sounds so interesting! A sister version of Cain and Abel, probably rewritten with a different storyline....I'm unsure, either way, thats fascinating! I'd love to read it when you finish!! Is it going to be poem or novel form? If that's what you decide to do? I'm assuming poem because of Edgar Allen Poe but I'm unsure, anyways, great idea and I can't wait to read it :)
Aww thx @poetofsteel LOL
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