I assume most of you are familiar with what Mad Libs are. Basically, you're given a bunch of blanks to fill in, and you do so without knowing what the story is. Each blank has a part of speech labeling it, and that blank needs something that fits the part of speech. For example: Adjective: ________ --> Adjective: Explosive In the end, we usually have a hilarious end result that makes no sense whatsoever. One example is this (which is a real result I got once with my siblings): "Another way to help you fall asleep faster is drinking a nuclear glass of warm vinegar ." First, let's go over some rules. Obviously, keep it family friendly. This still goes for all blog content. Do not submit two words in a row. Submit one, and when someone else does one, you may do another. Submit through comments. That'll make it easier for me to assemble the final result. The category is Medieval Heroes . Here are the blanks: Adjective: Constipated (Kyra) Per
I read through the story again and I honestly could not find anything to edit from your part or Kyra's. The only thing I noticed was a sentence I wrote in part two that sort of conflicts with part three in my opinion.
ReplyDeleteAlright, cool :D
DeleteWhich sentence?
This one: "And at first, the connection didn’t hit me." It's in the middle of part two about L.H.O. When it's revealed who L.H.O really is in part three, well, the sentence in part two just stands out.
DeleteHmm...
DeleteWe'll wait for Kyra's thoughts xD
Good eye. I completely missed that line. We could either get rid of the line "And at first, the connection didn’t hit me." or we can write it off, because the story is written in past tense, so it could be like the main character is reteliing her past, so it could be forshadowing for what's revealed in the next part.
DeleteAny suggestions on what we should do, Lucy and Mark?
I think, we could change the man to be her grandfather's identical twin, but as a detective (and knowing who she was), he was wearing a fake beard and hat. Then we could add a couple of times before the flashback where the man seems familiar, but she can't place it :D
DeleteThat'll be cool! How will that fix the contradiction though?
DeleteIdk. It's just a first step
Deletelol. So instead of being juat a brother, he's the twin?
DeleteAlso, THANK YOU SO MUCH, Lucy! I really didn't want to do the collaborative challenge until you wrote about the initials and didn't answer who they belonged too. As soon as I saw that paragraph, my mind started planing what'll happen next. XD
Yeah. Idk, though. I didn't write anything about the initials or brother... xD
DeleteHmm... It could work from one angle that everything is being relayed in past tense, but the flashback is more of telling him what had happened before and after her Grandfather died--which is why I think the line stands out a bit. Lol. But, I don't know, I do like the thought of it being a foreshadowing of some sorts with his identity.
DeleteThat's an interesting idea. I like that too. With him being an identical twin, it would make much more sense with that line in part two--that there's something familiar about him and as she processes the memories, she makes a connection between her Grandfather and L.H.O.
I'm now thinking that maybe she's seen the initials in early childhood somewhere like in a scrapbook or something--which is why the connection at first didn't hit her until processing the memories again?
That'll be so cool! Ask Mark if you can write another section. I'd love to see what you'll write. :)
DeleteSo our conclusion seems to be "I have no idea" XD
I would let you (Lucy, not Kyra) write another part, especially since the "Make Mark Borne Write A Particular Poem" was added after she wrote her part
DeleteCool. Thanks! :) Would it be okay if I just added in a little section to part two, instead of writing another part? I mainly ask since I just wrote four kind of small paragraphs that I think fixed the error/loophole. Lol.
DeleteAnd, thank you, Kyra. :) I hope you'll like what I added in.
Sure :D
DeleteSubmit them in any way is easy for you and I'll figure it out xD