This poem is a companion poem to Marysa Writes' poem "Lion"
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Among the weeds, and plants that grow,
A menace lurks, ready to strike.
Coiled and ready, with fangs of venom,
The Serpent lies in wait for prey.
But never does it rush straight
Like the Lion in its pursuits,
Instead relying on traps and bait.
And thus the Lion comes, its teeth bared,
It roars and howls and leaps forwards.
And just like that, the Lion's gone,
Swallowed in the hole the Serpent made.
Persistence rewards, and valor saves,
But beware the Serpent's cunning,
Which devours any and all.
Okay, I was refreshing the page and then this shows up! 😁 Lol. Anyway, I really love this poem, Mark. It’s really descriptive, and I think this is now my favorite poem of yours. I love your descriptions and it flows really well. As always, awesome work on this piece.
ReplyDeleteAwesome! :D Thanks!
DeleteI love this lol
ReplyDeletepoor me tho
if I am, in fact, the lion
Lol Thanks!
DeleteYou might be, but here's a strategy that almost always works in video games: wait, check the place out, consider where traps/snipers might be, and then when you know of the possible dangers, charge in with a manner that would allow you to adapt to these dangers. Then the only danger is what you cannot predict
This is SO good! It describes a serpent and it's patterns perfectly, plus I love the way you wrote it and the order it's placed in. The descriptions are awesome too, it's like a story! Great piece! :D
ReplyDeletePoor Mars xD
Which do you like better, the Lion or the Serpent? (Well, okay, Biblically, I know you'd like the Lion better, but when it comes to the poems in and of themselves, which one?)
DeleteI love both xD
DeleteI like the imagery in this poem, its really good, Mark. :) When I first started reading it, I was reading with a symbolic eye. So, when I read the snake ate the lion, I was like, "Wait, what?!" And then I realized you were just describing the snake in the ways of nature, not in Biblical level. I got confused for a few seconds, that's all. Anyway, this was a good poem. (Though, on a Biblical level and in nature I like the Lion better. Snakes gross me out. And I heard of snakes eating alligators, but can it actually eat a lion? Those things got huge paws, that can crush a serpent's head.)
ReplyDeleteBut a serpent is a really large snake, so hypothetically, if the lion was caught offguard, yes. But, on a Biblical level, Jesus (well, the Holy Trinity in general, which is referenced as the Lion) cannot be caught offguard, so ultimately, Satan (called the Serpent more times in the Bible by his actual name, I think; could be wrong) cannot defeat Jesus
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