Breathing defines
Whether or not
I am alive
So I must ask
Why is it that
I am breathing
But I do not feel alive
Why do I feel suffocated
By the thoughts in my brain
If breathing defines
Whether or not
I am alive
I’d rather not be breathing
Because this doesn’t feel like life
Whether or not
I am alive
So I must ask
Why is it that
I am breathing
But I do not feel alive
Why do I feel suffocated
By the thoughts in my brain
If breathing defines
Whether or not
I am alive
I’d rather not be breathing
Because this doesn’t feel like life
Wow. This is intense, but AMAZING!!!!!! I love how you define "life" and then stretch and contort it with how you feel. It makes you question everything. This is such a thought provoking piece.
ReplyDeleteThis is an emotional piece, and I really liked reading this. As Kyra said, I do agree that it is intense. I love how in-depth this poem is, and I feel like I can relate to it in some lines. Awesome work on this piece.
ReplyDeleteAs always, another beautiful piece. I love the depth and how it deepens your perspective on something as simple as breathing. It's really beautiful Lys, great job!
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